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Help me, my doll.
I think I've begun to fade away.
I don't remember you at all.
I barely remember yesterday.

But we were walking through the grass so green.
I stopped dead when you looked through me.

I swear you can see my soul,
At least, whatever remains.
The sun began to feel so cold,
And I thought your tears were rain.

Help me, doll.
Because I cannot help myself.
You always knew that I would fall.
But I believed like no one else.

We used to walk through the grass so green.
I stopped dead when you looked through me.

You can look straight at my heart,
At least, whatever I call my core.
Your eyes still tear me apart,
But you don't love me any more.

All these years I silently hoped,
Everything would just fall back together.
But now you're out on the ropes,
And I'm swearing that I could get better.

A lost cause is always a lost cause,
No matter how hard we stall.
I'll bleed no matter how much gauze.
I thought you'd always be my doll.
You're my doll.
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tojoluver Featured By Owner May 5, 2010
made me cry.
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sythesite Featured By Owner May 1, 2010
beautiful and haunting!
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VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner May 1, 2010
Thank you!
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DraculaAzuri Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2010  Student General Artist
its written so well, very sad as well
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LeananWinterborn Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
very sad... but really well written though! =)
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edleen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
This lyric makes sense to me, and it actually reminds me of something I experience once, with my ex girlfriend. Walking along somehwere, and suddenly feeling like you hav opened up and allowing someone else to look behind your facade in a way.

I could see this be made into a song, but I am somehow unclear of what the melody would be. But then again, I know nothing of music :)
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VampiricBunny Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2010
I'll bleed no matter how much gauze.
I thought you'd always be my doll.

I love these two lines, and as the comments above, I too can relate to this, However.. because shes a "doll", it kinda indicates that shes too perfect to be real, and I think that is clever, yet saddening. I really like it.
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VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2010
Yes, it's a phrase I've wanted to work into a song for a while, I'm glad you like it! Thank you for reading! :D
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lulusoccer Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I like that so many people can relate to this piece (I know I can myself) and I really felt connected to what you were saying. Nicely composed!
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VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2010
Yea, at first I was surprised that so many people connected to it, but then I thought about it and it makes sense.

Thank you very much! :D
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