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Help me, my doll.
I think I've begun to fade away.
I don't remember you at all.
I barely remember yesterday.

But we were walking through the grass so green.
I stopped dead when you looked through me.

I swear you can see my soul,
At least, whatever remains.
The sun began to feel so cold,
And I thought your tears were rain.

Help me, doll.
Because I cannot help myself.
You always knew that I would fall.
But I believed like no one else.

We used to walk through the grass so green.
I stopped dead when you looked through me.

You can look straight at my heart,
At least, whatever I call my core.
Your eyes still tear me apart,
But you don't love me any more.

All these years I silently hoped,
Everything would just fall back together.
But now you're out on the ropes,
And I'm swearing that I could get better.

A lost cause is always a lost cause,
No matter how hard we stall.
I'll bleed no matter how much gauze.
I thought you'd always be my doll.
You're my doll.
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:icontojoluver:
tojoluver Featured By Owner May 5, 2010
made me cry.
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:iconsythesite:
sythesite Featured By Owner May 1, 2010
beautiful and haunting!
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VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner May 1, 2010
Thank you!
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DraculaAzuri Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2010  Student General Artist
its written so well, very sad as well
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LeananWinterborn Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
very sad... but really well written though! =)
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edleen Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
This lyric makes sense to me, and it actually reminds me of something I experience once, with my ex girlfriend. Walking along somehwere, and suddenly feeling like you hav opened up and allowing someone else to look behind your facade in a way.

I could see this be made into a song, but I am somehow unclear of what the melody would be. But then again, I know nothing of music :)
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VampiricBunny Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2010
I'll bleed no matter how much gauze.
I thought you'd always be my doll.

I love these two lines, and as the comments above, I too can relate to this, However.. because shes a "doll", it kinda indicates that shes too perfect to be real, and I think that is clever, yet saddening. I really like it.
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:iconvoltanechoes:
VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2010
Yes, it's a phrase I've wanted to work into a song for a while, I'm glad you like it! Thank you for reading! :D
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lulusoccer Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I like that so many people can relate to this piece (I know I can myself) and I really felt connected to what you were saying. Nicely composed!
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:iconvoltanechoes:
VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2010
Yea, at first I was surprised that so many people connected to it, but then I thought about it and it makes sense.

Thank you very much! :D
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Flannelmouth Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
This pisses me off, I never get this many comments on my art. ;D
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:iconvoltanechoes:
VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
I whore myself out for comments. :D
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:iconflannelmouth:
Flannelmouth Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
you Bastard, TEACH ME YOUR WAYS.
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:iconvoltanechoes:
VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
I can't. If I knew how I did it, I would, but it's just natural.
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:iconflannelmouth:
Flannelmouth Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
Gay...
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LadyIndigo2 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
I really like this! I always appreciate a poet who, ya know, actually bothers to rhyme things! (Even though I don't always do!)

It's very heart-breaking, and I think it could definitely become something if you turned it into a song :).
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VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
I'm down for rhymes, as long as it's not forced. And generally when I'm writing, it all flows and there's nothing forced about it from my perspective, so it's all good. I appreciate that you appreciate it. :D

Well, I plan on recording the songs I've written and putting them up... somewhere, so when I do that, I'll link it on dA for all to hear. :la:
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LadyIndigo2 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
That would be AWESOME!

Y'know what, dude? You win a watch! :D
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:iconvoltanechoes:
VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
!

Sick! Thank you so much! :D
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LadyIndigo2 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
No problem, dude. You deserve it!
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mbloomer04 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
a really beautiful song,

can I ask what genre you were thinking of when you wrote it?
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VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
I was thinking of a sort of alt-rock song, and I think I have the riff worked out. But these things change more often than the temperature, so we'll see. ^^;
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mbloomer04 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
:D
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:iconorangehamster:
orangehamster Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010  Student Digital Artist
i guess i can relate to these words ^^"
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:iconvoltanechoes:
VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
Yea, I think this kind of sadness reaches a lot of people. Which is sad in and of itself. Thanks for reading. :)
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delusional-dreams Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Really sad, but beautifully written ^-^ lovely piece
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:iconvoltanechoes:
VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
Thank you very much for reading! :D
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foxglove92 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Sweet like white sugar, loved it, ano what it's like to feel that. :+favlove:
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VoltanEchoes Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2010
Yea, it's a pain. But such is life.

Thanks for the fav! :D
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